Vacation is over and now it's back to our regularly scheduled program! On one of my many flights I read The Fire Within by Racquel Kechagias. I received this book from the author via one of my book clubs on goodreads in exchange for an honest review. You can find my review and others here. Overall, it has great story potential but it is in need of a much better editor to polish it up.
Anna is a young woman who is betrothed before birth to the Vampire King, Victor. He life growing up was a rough one filled with only a few true companions and not much love. When it comes time for her to marry she is offered multiple men by her father who attempts to back-out of his deal with Victor. Luckily, Anna falls for him anyway...
All of this sounds very YA and not bad so far, here's my problem. Just like when Anna picks Victor over the other men, the story was riddled with unexplained choices or actions. There was very little of the character's thoughts portrayed to the reader and more of us being shown the outcomes. A third through the book we are introduced to the world of fae, mer-folk, etc. While they were interesting to read about it was never really clear if all of this was a known societal thing or if they were hidden races, just one example of how the plot was hindered by the writing.
The reason I kept reading was the villain in the story, Christian. He was deeply emotional and just more compelling than all of the other characters combined (though I did want to know more about Shade and his past). Unfortunately, I was disappointed by the end of the book as his character was mostly neglected after the mid-point in the book. Seeing as how the story ended I am holding out hope for the second book to feature him more.
My main issue with this story is the editing... or seeming lack of it entirely. There were grammar errors, tense errors and WAY too many point-of-view switches. All of this made it extremely difficult to get into the book and I found myself wanting to skim more than read. The story has real potential and if expanded upon and spread out a bit, more explanations, and fewer POVs it could be a great read.